It felt so wrong??
The thought of someone else
That??s when I knew with certainty
That matches the confidence
Of the hour hand the path it
Has been destined to travel
That my heart belongs to you??the 2nd one is better because it is understandable.It is really broken...It's not that great, try putting more feelings into it. Sounds like you cheated and now you are trying to make it better with a poem, is so that is laime.The last five lines are in need of better seperation of thought.There IS A LOT of poetry that sucks . . . Mostly because there are some poems that totally lack rhythm & rhyme . . . And that is why so many people HATE POETRY! Well, yours is no different. Congratulations!!!its okay...Sorry it just does not flow right. explain what you are feeling. You are using words to cover words. What felt wrong having thoughts of someone else or being with someone else? Where is the How and What? How did you know with certainty that you are suppose to be with the other person? What gave it away? Think a little deeper write what you are feeling inside no strings. Good luck I hope this helps:)It does sound off key. It sounds like sentences rather than a poem. Try to add more between the lines, to make the rhyme.

I write poetry myself, and while I'm not a professional, I can honestly say that with work, this poem will rock!

First timer? Don't stop, just keep trying! I've been writing for 6 years now, and still don't get it right all the time.

:)